Romeo and Juliet: Assessment Results

Over-All grade: 6A

  1. Analysis of Shakespeare’s Language: 6A – Confident understanding of a range of language devices, their purpose and effect.
  2. Timeline: 6A – detailed and perceptive.
  3. Original Play: 6A – Effective employment of a range of Shakespearian devices in an original context.
  4. Essay:
    • Reading Grade: 6A – A sophisticated appreciation of the lingustic, stylistic, generic and historical context of the play. You challenged yourself to source your own examples and make original points, and in doing so made it clear that your understanding was deep and subtle. Be careful not to make claims about Shakespeare that you are not certain of – like his tendency to use a narrator or refer to the theme of fate.
    • Writing Grade: 5A – Well structured, with lapses in style and mechanical accuracy. There is a high level of demand in analytical writing to use standard English forms. While your use of idiom (such as “peaking out”) was vivid and denoted your enthusiasm, it was also jarring in the context of a formal analysis.

My thoughts on Metaphorical Paragraph: Draft 2

This is the paragraph said by Romeo just before he dies:


From this world-wearied flesh. Eyes, look your last! Arms, take your last embrace! and, lips, O you The doors of breath, seal with a righteous kiss A dateless bargain to engrossing death! Come, bitter conduct, come, unsavoury guide! Thou desperate pilot, now at once run on The dashing rocks thy sea-sick weary bark! Here’s to my love

Some notes:

In the beginning line Romeo is personifying  his eyes and telling them to look at the world while they can.He is also saying he is fatigued and so is his skin from the world.

He is continuing to personify his body and telling his arms that this hug with Juliet will be there last, then he begins to say about his lips, which for me, his language looks like he thinks they are his best quality.

Romeo says to his lips that this kiss with Juliet will be there last and to remember it, he says the great doors of breath, because breath is right, will close with a kiss which is the right thing to do, ( and i think it has something to do with death and performing the last rights/rites at a funeral).

Next he says his last thing he does is see the “engrossing death” which he is making out to be a bargain that he doesn’t want, a fruitless bargain you could say. Then in the next line he beckons for death to come and describes what he does as bitter. Then in my opinion he leads onto that God made death and is feeling disdain for god.

He says God is desperate and that god is the pilot who actually steers him to the harbor which is his destiny, which is death. He says now run into the danger and the heartbreak of the rocks and the wild sea that pounds against them.

Romeo compares life to the sea and uses the metaphor I am sea-sick which translates into i am sick of life and i want it to stop. He then says he is doing this for his love.

The main metaphor’s are at the end when he is referring to the sea and the pilot.

What Romeo is really saying is that… fate won,that he has been trying and trying to run away from his fate, he has been trying to fight it, he has been trying to steer it away from there, he can’t. Romeo has given up. Romeo has made some mistakes and referred to it earlier by saying he was “fortunes fool”. His tone is suicidal. This stanza is one of the most significant, as he is putting up his hands up, this is also viewed as tragic as the audience knows that Juliet isn’t really dead, and a few more minutes she would be awake. Juliet dying subsequently kills Romeo… dramatic irony is… She is not dead.

An earlier example of this him reliseing that fate was in play, was him saying:  “He that hath steerage of my course, direct my sail”. This final passage in many ways is a end to what has been a “great game.” You could compare it a bit to the movie where the main charachter is always being filmed for his own 24 hour T.V show and he knows nothing, then he begins to find and figure out, the one difference would be : He wins the battle V fate. Like most media, there is usually a happy ending, but in Romeo and Julie, fate is the only winner.


Shakespeare is known for his fabulous plays but his writing had a lot deeper meaning than what is blatantly reveals. He uses many metaphors like

Thou desperate pilot, now at once run on The dashing rocks thy sea-sick weary bark!

What this means is that Romeo says god is the man steering him to his destiny of death, this he refers to as ” The dashing rocks ” and he says he is sea sick, he means that he is sick of life. I hope this proves my point that Shakespeare wasn’t just a great action writer, he also put a lot of thought into writing his marvelous plays.


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